Adding detail to sentences
In a workshop today we focused on using rich engaging language to add impact for our reader. Below are the images that we used for impact.
Lily's Worlds Experience
Lily has just returned from racing at the BMX World Champs held in Rockhill, SC, USA. With over 3500 competitors from 40 countries this year was the biggest World Champs ever held. Conditions were very hot and humid, several times practice was delayed by the intense thunderstorms when everybody had to evacuate the grounds to vehicles and buildings and wait for the all clear! Fortunately, race days were unaffected. Lily had a great day of racing, winning her 3 motos and transferring through the knockout rounds of 1/8, 1/4 and semi finals all the way to the Main (final), a huge achievement! Lily had a great start in her final and came out of the first corner in 4th, at the end of the 2nd straight she tangled with a USA rider and crashed. With her never give up attitude she got back on her bike and finished the race in 8th place. The Worlds experience is a unique opportunity to represent NZ as an age group representative and enjoy being with the team. Travelling to new places
Comments
Post a Comment